Edit: Why is the Sky Blue

Opened: Roger’s Essay “Why is the Sky Blue”

Unedited essay:

Why is the Sky Blue
by Roger

Why is the sky blue? Is this sky even blue? According to the author of the book we’re reading, the sky is not blue. The author uses metaphors, alliteration, and symbolism to prove that the sky is not blue.

First off, metaphors is used by the author to show that the sky being blue is just a figment of the human imagination. It’s not actually blue. “Quote,” (author, page number). The author uses this quote to show that faeries are tricking us into believing that the sky is blue. I don’t know how else to explain this, it’s pretty obvious.

Next, the author uses alliteration a lot. Like, “Blue blue blue baby born bath baffle blue blue ballistocardiograph, b-the b-sky b-is b-not blue” (Author, page number). It’s pretty cryptic, but I think the author is trying to say the sky is not blue.

Finally, the author used symbolism. Remember that rhino charging at the main character that one time? Yeah, symbolism for the sky isn’t blue. Remember how his sister tried to get him to buy a unicorn, but ended up turning him into  butterfly? Yeah, symbolism for the sky isn’t blue. Remember when his professor gave empirical evidence that the sky is blue? Yeah, symbolism for the sky isn’t blue.

In conclusion, I don’t feel like I need to repeat myself again, I should have made my point really clear in the above paragraphs. The end.

{lol guys my essays really bad, just a warning -Roger}

(No problem, no essay is perfect within the first draft -Obachuka)

[Yeah, don’t sweat it dude. That’s why we’re editing -Schnider]

(Jesus Christ, I just finished reading it; this essay is terrible -Obachuka)

Edited essay:

Why is the Sky Blue
by Roger

Why is the sky blue? (dude you already said this in the title -Obachuka) Is this sky even blue?(what kind of question is this? -Obachuka) [Oba, try reading the entire essay before commenting -Schnider] (I did read, don’t talk back to me -Obachuka) {guys were only 2 sentences into my essay and we already have more comments then essay. and theyre all bad comments -Roger} (don’t call my comments bad, don’t talk back to me -Oba) According to the author of the book we’re reading [Wtf is this, have you even read the book? -Schnider] {lolno, i dont even kno wat book were reading -Roger}, the sky is not blue. (Dude. How is the sky NOT BLUE? -Oba) […Oba, have you read the book? -Schnider] (We were supposed to read a book? -Oba) 

The author uses metaphors, alliteration, and symbolism to prove that the sky is not blue. [You already said “the sky is not blue”. Try using some other phrase like, “to solve the age old question of ‘why is the sky blue'” -Schnider] (Dude, that “age old question” has already been solved. And Roger already used “why is the sky blue.” Face it, Roger is doomed for eternity to be repetitive -Oba)

First off, metaphors is used by the author to show that the sky being blue is  just a figment of the human imagination. (This is the most awkward sentence I’ve ever read. It’s almost as awkward as that time when I walked in on my cousin and his girlfriend in the bedroom. -Oba) (In fact, it’s just as awkward as that time when I told my classmates while editing essays that I walked in on my cousin. -Oba) [WOW -Schnider] (Nah, jk, I made that up, that didn’t actually happen. Anyways, put the sentence in active voice instead of passive voice -Oba) It’s not actually blue. [You’ve said this so many times. When you write, make sure your sentences actually matter -Schn] (Schnider, your name looks hella stupid when shortened -Oba) [stfu, -S] “Quote,” (author, page number). [Yeah, how about getting a real quote? -S] The author uses this quote to show that faeries are tricking us into believing that the sky is blue. [That was not at all what the author was saying. READ THE BOOK -S] I don’t know how else to explain this, it’s pretty obvious. [Wow, really? Terrible sentence, get rid of it -S] (Are you being sarcastic? This is the best sentence in the whole essay so far. Keep it -Oba)

Next, the author uses alliteration a lot. Like [Don’t say “like” -S] (Yeah, I agree, like totally -Oba), “Blue blue blue baby born bath baffle blue blue ballistocardiograph, b-the b-sky b-is b-not blue” (Author, page number). (Awesome quote! Thumbs up -Oba) [Roger, quit bs’ing. This quote wasn’t in the book -S] It’s pretty cryptic, but I think the author is trying to say the sky is not blue. (Wow good catch, I did not notice that -Oba) [Don’t listen to him, he’s being sarcastic -S] (I wasn’t being sarcastic -Oba) [Oh my bad. Yeah this sentence was really great. -S]  {wow snider dont be sarcastic, jerk, im trying to rite an essay -Roger} [… -S] (Great going Schnider -Oba)

Finally, the author used symbolism. [You honestly need better transitions and topic sentences -S] (Great going Schnider -Oba) Remember that rhino charging at the main character that one time? (No I don’t remember -Oba) Yeah, symbolism for the sky isn’t blue. [How in the world did you reach this conclusion? -S] (Great going Schnider -Oba) Remember how his sister tried to get him to buy a unicorn, but ended up turning him into  butterfly? (No I don’t remember -Oba) [I’m agreeing with Oba on this one. I don’t remember. Pretty sure you made this up -S] Yeah, symbolism for the sky isn’t blue. [Roger my man. You are the master of bs -S] Remember when his professor gave empirical evidence that the sky is blue? (No I don’t remember -Oba) Yeah, symbolism for the sky isn’t blue. (Ooooooohhh, that makes sense. Now I get it! -Oba)

In conclusion, I don’t feel like I need to repeat myself again, I should have made my point really clear in the above paragraphs. The end. (Wow. Wow. This is single-handedly the best conclusion I’ve ever read. The best part about your essay -Oba) [Are you kidding? Dude, Ms. Gertrude will skin you alive if you don’t change this conclusion when you turn it in -S] (Schnider’s being sarcastic again -Oba) {wow SNIDER i told u to stop being sarcastic!!!1!1 -Roger} [… -S] (Great going Schnider -Oba) [Obachuka. SHUT. THE **** UP! -S] (There’s no censor on this thing. You felt the need to censor yourself? Great going Schnider -Oba) (*clap* *clap* Oh good, that still works -Oba)

(All right, well we’re done editing your essay Roger. It wasn’t that bad, just needs a…okay. It was utterly terrible, I have to be honest -Oba)

{lol i kno it sucks, ill fix it before tmrw xD -Roger}

[Yeah, it definitely needs severe fixing -S]

{wow dont be so mean snider, u hurt my feelings -Roger}

(I feel like your spelling has been progressively getting worse, Roger. Are you doing this on purpose? -Oba)

{I have no clue what you’re talking about, my good man. -Roger}

[Okay well let’s edit Obachuka’s essay now -S]

{Yes, let’s. My good man. -Roger}

(I haven’t started yet. -Oba)

[It’s due the end of tomorrow you know… -S]

(Really?! The END of tomorrow? Omg so much time, yessss -Oba)

[…Okay well edit my essay then I guess. Though I don’t feel safe with either of you editing my essay -S]

(Don’t worry you can trust me -Oba)

[Okay here’s the file guys. Open it up, and we’ll talk in there -S]

Opened: Schnider’s Essay “The Reason of Our Existence”

(Whoops -Oba)

[WHERE. IS. MY. ESSSSAAAAAAYYY??!!! -S]

(Don’t fret man. I can fix this -Oba)

Ctrl+Z

(Uh oh -Oba)

[OBACHUKA, YOU, GRAARGFHASDFDKJWOI;D;FJOIWKXZO -S]

{I think he’s mad, my good man -Roger}

(Great going Roger -Oba)

(You have a copy right? -Oba)

[Yeah, I have it here on my…u…s…b… -S]

(You all right man? -Oba)

[WHERE IS MY USB?! -S]

(Oh right, you left it here at my house -Oba)

[Oh thank god, can you send the files over? – S]

(Sure thing man -Oba)

[Phew, I was really worried there. Thanks! -S]

{All’s well that ends well, my good man -Roger}

(… -Oba)

[… Oba…? -S]

(Whoops -Oba)

[DAMN IT OBA IF YOU -S]

Obachuka signed off.

[SADKLFJASLKDJSADFLD YOU SUCK DUDE -S]

{You should have kept a copy on your computer, my good man. -Roger}

[SDKFJAS;LDKJZX VESO; -S]

Roger signed off.

[FFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFF -S]

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